Wednesday, February 15, 2012

Is this a good poem/ am i a good poet?

Once upon my wounds i wept, and now again i cry.

Never to escape th pain, as again and again i die.

i hoped and prayed upon my wound, my prayer was not to keep.

Once again i die alone, my soul was put to sleep.

Weep for the little girl, as she dies and dies again.

For no one could ever understand, how and where she's been.

a Battlefield, a lonely life, was all to keep her sane.

But never did it undertake, her heart's forbidden strain.

a scared little girl i was, a girl as old as age.

Nothing could contain her sorrow, nothing could surpass her rage.

A great love marked his watery grave, a love that was but a loss.

No more to die and die again, for her boy among the moss.

She loves him still and forevermore, but the grave to prove his part.

A lone flower, and widowed girl, forever mourn for her braveheart.



Please tell me what you think, i need to know whether i am good or not.........

Is this a good poem/ am i a good poet?
i don't think any proof of your mastery needed afer these 31 answer, 31 answer in itself is great reward .



your poems donot deflects much this is a good quality and best thing is we as reader can imagine the whole story .



the only thing i can do is to pray for you , may you get best out of life .

if you don't mind you can share your pain with me .
Reply:It's a good poem, but beware... Someone could easily steal your work. Make sure it is patented before you post your poems unless you don't mind that others could take credit for it.
Reply:yay you! ..................... that dusnt sound good it only sounds good wen u say it bout urself.................. ok so say YAY ME!!!!!!

that poem wuz awesum ur a good writer hehehehehe i like poems................ and chocolate.................................. and ireland.................................... and mor chocolate.......................
Reply:i think it is really good. i write poetry also. i think its fun and i like to look back on what ive written. well keep up the good work
Reply:wow it may be a good poem but it is full of tragic angst. hopefully you don't really feel and live this poem. lighten up a little for your own good, and keep writing poems. maybe try to alternate between gloom and sunshine. balance baby balance
Reply:This is honestly an opinion but i think its pretty good. As for a poet you can't judge that on one poem. But pretty good.
Reply:its awonderful poem and your a great poet i hope that you get a good career
Reply:its very deep and i like it very much you are a good poet.
Reply:Actually, the poem was awesome. And hate sad crybaby poems.
Reply:you should not share original work with anyone until it has been copyrighted or filed with the writer's guild.--------it's okay--------- too many syllables in the last line (other than that it's okay).
Reply:I liked it and I love poetry!! Keep up the good work. Where did you get the feelings to write this? Please answer me back. mgw20nwv@yahoo.com
Reply:It's a good poem, If your trying to be a poet you could enter some contest on-line
Reply:Dude, honey, that was good! I love it. Keep up the awsome freakin work! LOVE IT!!
Reply:awsome!!!
Reply:If you like death then its great
Reply:Stop crying over your boy that left you....move on.
Reply:It's good...
Reply:I loved your poem. There was a lot of good feeling and good form. You have a great talent. I am guessing you are quite young, not from the quality of the poem, but your subject. As your talent developes, I expect to see a lot of your poems a lot of places. Keep copies of what you write, and date them. If your bank has a free notary, write the work of "your name" and the date it was written, and have them stamp it. This is neither a copyright , or as good as one, but it will offer some protection for your work. I am sort of wondering if you have been through things expressed in your poem. If so, my prayers for your comfort. Keep Writing. Get a copy of "Writers Market". My best.
Reply:well it is good but you can still improve %26amp; widen your reportoire
Reply:I love it email me at genocyber69@yahoo.com when you

write another poem.
Reply:yes, that is very good. I love your style it's very in depth. keep it up. God bless u.
Reply:It is not to bad but take some of the bumps to make it flow. There has to be phrases in their that give you a picture in your mind while your reading it. The title can kind of set the tone of the picture you want readers to get in their mind
Reply:Deep........very deep! I like it, keep writing!
Reply:very good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Reply:If this is yours, I like it. It's powerful.
Reply:yeah awesome
Reply:I absolutely love it! I wish that I was poetic. I've tried and really suck



Reality the cruelest dream

Nothings ever as it seems

No more flowers and butterflies

We all grow up we live we die

Nothings ever as it seems

Reality the cruelest dream
Reply:Very nice, but why so glum?
Reply:You have got depth and imagery in your poem. Well done. But realise that there is more youcan achieve. But for this poem, it was very good. Keep up the good work. :-)
Reply:Its really not bad .. a little sad tho and I don't know how old you are so I don't want to discourage you , just work on the basics, beginning muddle and end...the rest will come...you do have talent
Reply:It's intriguing but it sounds like you have some issues to get through. I hope you get help. :)


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